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【帮我修改英语作文,逐句分析,并打分,15满分,送10个财富值,近年来网上学习越来越流行,产生这现象的原因,我的看法.inrecentyears,itismoreandmorepopulartolearnonline.whysomanypeopleliketolearningon】
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帮我修改英语作文,逐句分析,并打分,15满分,送10个财富值,
近年来网上学习越来越流行,产生这现象的原因,我的看法.
inrecentyears,itismoreandmorepopulartolearnonline.whysomanypeopleliketolearningonline?
themainreasonisconvenience,youcanlearnonlinewheneverandwhereveryouare.moreover,time-savingisalsoanimportantreasonforsomanypeoplelearningonline.speciallymanypeoplearebusyinworkingduringtheday,theyhavenotimetohaveclassexpectatnight,butmostofthemarenotwillingtotakepartinnormalclass.
inmyopinion,everycoinhastwosides,sodoesE-learning.E-learningprovidesmorechancesforustolearnknowledge,widenourinsight.butitiseasytomakeuslossourselvesinplayingcomputergames.itnotonlywasteourtime,butalsomakeuslosetheinterestinginstudying.sowehavebettertochoosetoE-learningafterdeeplythinking.
路义萍回答：
在尊重原文的基础上修改如下：
Inrecentyears,itismoreandmorepopulartolearnonline.whydosomanypeopleliketolearnonline?
Themainreasonisconvenience.Youcanlearnonlinewheneveritisandwhereveryouare.Moreover,time-savingisalsoanimportantreasonforsomanypeopletolearnonline.Especiallymanypeoplearebusyinworkingduringtheday,theyhavenotimetohaveclassesexpectatnight,andmostofthemarenotwillingtotakepartinnormalclasses.
Inmyopinion,everycoinhastwosides,sodoesE-learning.E-learningprovidesmorechancesforustolearnknowledge,widensourinsight.butitiseasytomakeusloseourselvesinplayingcomputergames.itnotonlywastesourtime,butalsomakesuslosetheinterestinginstudying.sowehadbetterthinkitoverbeforewechooseE-learning.
请多注意主谓一致,如果能用一些非谓语形式及主从复合句形式,使句子更加紧凑简练,你的得分会更高.就这篇作文,我给你中档分10分,表达基本清楚,语句较通顺,有部分从句运用.
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